Nicely written, Mr. Collide. We need not endure a punch-in-the-gut of any kind nor absurd fantasy, nor sickening sweet language that nobody real actually uses. The tasteful demur about the passionate details is appropriate and makes the reader run his own mind to fill in what the parties in the story are experiencing. Conjugal affection is not a spectator sport, and most of us
have experience to draw from while imagining our own paragraphs to add. I feel sorry for anyone who has not dared to enter the passion pit to explore climbing to never-before-known heights of ecstasy and passion for himself.
I really like the way it ended. You left room for a continuance if you want to, & avoided a cliched resolution -- either good or bad. (In fact, you avoided cliche throughout -- good job!)
You have talent, certainly. I look forward to seeing what else you come up with.
Thanks, Tom! I didn’t know how to end it, so went with how high school (and I think life) ends…by trailing off to the next adventure. As for cliches, I’m sure there are quite a few. I’m a sentimental sap, so not afraid of a little cliche. Appreciate your words of encouragement. Cheers!
Awwwww…thanks, Ray! I didn’t know how this might be received. Just needed to reframe some of my own story. Putting it 20+ years earlier definitely didn’t hurt. Glad you enjoyed. 🌈✌️❤️
Probably in The Advocate when David Goodstein was still alive, there was an interview with Patricia Nell Warren. She was a real human female and did write The Front Runner and other novels under her name. She was Lesbian, but writing from that perspective cut too close to the quick for her emotionally, so she wrote about Gay men and the hostile world they lived in. A brave writer with brave editors and publishing house at the time.
Doug - Have you seen Red, White and Royal Blue? It is based on a story written by Casey McQuiston about the First Son of the POTUS and a British Prince failing for each other. It is kind of the "from enemies to friends to lovers" trope but there are scenes in there that are truly breathtaking. I'll just say one more word - Paris!
I feel ya. Only a few “gay” books have passed muster with me. Mostly non-fiction. Which is why I struggle to write now. But this little ditty was fun. And whatever I do, I try to always look for a silver-lining, even if there’s no “happily ever after.” Cheers!
Honestly, I debated it…but I wanted the reader to be able to create that picture for themselves. Or be that character themselves. Also, I wasn’t thrilled with the versions I created for “me” so kept it all about Josh, who I still have quite a crush on after all these years. Those baby blues always get me in trouble. lol
Nicely written, Mr. Collide. We need not endure a punch-in-the-gut of any kind nor absurd fantasy, nor sickening sweet language that nobody real actually uses. The tasteful demur about the passionate details is appropriate and makes the reader run his own mind to fill in what the parties in the story are experiencing. Conjugal affection is not a spectator sport, and most of us
have experience to draw from while imagining our own paragraphs to add. I feel sorry for anyone who has not dared to enter the passion pit to explore climbing to never-before-known heights of ecstasy and passion for himself.
I would like more please. Mr. Clint.
Thanks for the vote of confidence, Fred. Gonna work on some new videos first, but I will likely return to the “scene of the crime” again soon. Cheers!
I really like the way it ended. You left room for a continuance if you want to, & avoided a cliched resolution -- either good or bad. (In fact, you avoided cliche throughout -- good job!)
You have talent, certainly. I look forward to seeing what else you come up with.
Thanks, Tom! I didn’t know how to end it, so went with how high school (and I think life) ends…by trailing off to the next adventure. As for cliches, I’m sure there are quite a few. I’m a sentimental sap, so not afraid of a little cliche. Appreciate your words of encouragement. Cheers!
Aaaww. I feel warm inside and I keep sighing. A sweet nostalgia takes me back to my 1972. Memories and feels. Thank you. xxx
Awwwww…thanks, Ray! I didn’t know how this might be received. Just needed to reframe some of my own story. Putting it 20+ years earlier definitely didn’t hurt. Glad you enjoyed. 🌈✌️❤️
A very sweet, romantic story. We're going to need further chapters of "Josh and me". The combination of the narration and the fauxtos was excellent.
Thank you, Tim! It’s so hard to know how others will respond, but I might have more installments. No timeline, but I like the idea.
Probably in The Advocate when David Goodstein was still alive, there was an interview with Patricia Nell Warren. She was a real human female and did write The Front Runner and other novels under her name. She was Lesbian, but writing from that perspective cut too close to the quick for her emotionally, so she wrote about Gay men and the hostile world they lived in. A brave writer with brave editors and publishing house at the time.
Doug - Have you seen Red, White and Royal Blue? It is based on a story written by Casey McQuiston about the First Son of the POTUS and a British Prince failing for each other. It is kind of the "from enemies to friends to lovers" trope but there are scenes in there that are truly breathtaking. I'll just say one more word - Paris!
I feel ya. Only a few “gay” books have passed muster with me. Mostly non-fiction. Which is why I struggle to write now. But this little ditty was fun. And whatever I do, I try to always look for a silver-lining, even if there’s no “happily ever after.” Cheers!
Honestly, I debated it…but I wanted the reader to be able to create that picture for themselves. Or be that character themselves. Also, I wasn’t thrilled with the versions I created for “me” so kept it all about Josh, who I still have quite a crush on after all these years. Those baby blues always get me in trouble. lol